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JRCasteLv41yr
2023-12-29 22:50

would've rated higher, but quality of the story quickly dropped down mid vol 1 and 2. what happened Author. you were doing really good at the beginning.Writing quality 3/5 at first it was 4 almost 5 but it wasnt, sometimes the preference of his writing style is cringe.story development is 3/5 because I got confused both with the story and the MC himself. is he autistic?character design and update stability are both 5, because it was atleast creative and stable in updatesworld background is 4/5 its okay atleast, still dont'tunderstand some things but great potential, dont waste it.I rated it while keeping in mind this work is Authors first.

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A4KL
A4KLAuthor

Yeah Thanks, your words are genuine and upto the mark, If my guess is correct then the issue must be with those chapters about future and all, Apologies, At that time, I don't know what had gotten into me, But, I love your review and thank you for understanding me ~ It was my first book so have many errors but will try to improve myself, Please give a try to my other book too.

JRCaste
JRCasteLv4

Great then, you need to do a lil bit of tweaking of the MC tho, decide what's his personality/character and all cause being cringe and chad at the same time wont work. I meant it when I asked if he's autistic or somein, no offense xD and for reading you other work. I'll do exactly that rn

A4KL:Yeah Thanks, your words are genuine and upto the mark, If my guess is correct then the issue must be with those chapters about future and all, Apologies, At that time, I don't know what had gotten into me, But, I love your review and thank you for understanding me ~ It was my first book so have many errors but will try to improve myself, Please give a try to my other book too.
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A4KL
A4KLAuthor

yeah, I will do just that and about other novel, That MC will be go directly 5star rating 👍🏻

JRCaste:Great then, you need to do a lil bit of tweaking of the MC tho, decide what's his personality/character and all cause being cringe and chad at the same time wont work. I meant it when I asked if he's autistic or somein, no offense xD and for reading you other work. I'll do exactly that rn
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Hello readers, if you still exist and have any interest in this book, I am spinning this review to let everyone know that this story has received a remake. However, it's not that simple to explain the reason, given how I had already thought about this before writing the novel. Due to circumstances, like not being able to earn enough money to feed myself, I dropped it—yes, it's true. But there is already a book that starts anew with the old world and concept, though it features an enhanced version of every background story, with no hidden elements and a fully focused main character. To explain what happened and why the world changed, along with the main character's name, here is the explanation: According to the ending of the story, Zeph died inside the hidden realm, and Evangeline, who was battling against the Supreme Creator, was unable to save her son once again, just as she had previously lost him at the hands of Adriannel. Her mind spun in guilt over being used once again as a mere character for the entertainment of the Creator. This prompted her to use her full strength and break the seal of reality, opening the doors to alternate worlds and timelines. From the start, she created a world where, even though she had fallen into eternal slumber, she was able to bring her son back to that world. As mentioned in the original story, Zeph is originally the son of Evangeline, and in future chapters, it was about to be revealed how the Zeph who originally transmigrated had a piece of a soul part scattered throughout the multiverse inside of him. After his death in the hidden realm, that piece shattered and vanished. However, since it was just a piece, other fragments existed in different worlds. Evangeline, being able to use her strength, opened the same dimension to another world where she found another soul piece of her son living a life. With her own hand, she brought him back to the alternate timeline reality, but this time much earlier so her son could become strong enough in her absence. So the story mentioned below is kind of related to "Fat Villain," while at the same time, it is not. You will definitely find most of the character stories similar, but much more detailed. You can say the story is similar to at least 30%—so it is not a remake, but more likely a tribute.

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