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quaintLv61yr
2024-02-14 20:05

I'm out, it was great til he started teleporting around and grabbing customers, and even that was was fine. I Had to leave when he pulled up YouTube and started playing zhonglis character demo on the flat screen in his cafe.

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Micole_WelbersLv3

when did he start teleporting around? and the TV thing was talked about for like 2 sentences you should really keep reading. It's an amazing book

quaintLv6

when he ported in Klee.

Micole_Welbers:when did he start teleporting around? and the TV thing was talked about for like 2 sentences you should really keep reading. It's an amazing book
Yum_q327Lv1

Well, that's not the worst thing. In the future, his character could easily change from a stoic spirit to an almost betta ms who literally trembles when talking to girls, if you think I'm exaggerating then just read on. In fact, this story is wonderful, but I have always hated works where the characters are emotionally unstable and can, due to cheap author’s templates, push for pity or something like that.

quaintLv6

edit, the teleport this isn't as bad as i thought. but, the author starts coming up with weird in game lore about the mc and he does a shounen style power up at the end of the first book. it's like the author forgot he was writing about a coffee shop

Hua_God_AboveAllLv1

With his determination and many past stories and encounters and dealings with the archons, MC's body was also born in teyvat. The question is. ...... MC, why didn't he get Vision???? Or has his system cut off outside power? .

quaint:edit, the teleport this isn't as bad as i thought. but, the author starts coming up with weird in game lore about the mc and he does a shounen style power up at the end of the first book. it's like the author forgot he was writing about a coffee shop
TommiebLv3

what are you talking about he did get a vision

Hua_God_AboveAll:With his determination and many past stories and encounters and dealings with the archons, MC's body was also born in teyvat. The question is. ...... MC, why didn't he get Vision???? Or has his system cut off outside power? .
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