webnovel
Sin_of_greed1906
Sin_of_greed1906Lv121yr
2024-01-20 05:45

It just feels like the author can’t handle what he started. And common, I don’t mind reading copy and paste but just don’t let the names from the other novels slip up.

Liked by 4 people

LIKE
empty img

No replies. Be the first!

Other Reviews
BobbyBrowne
BobbyBrowneLv10

I feel like the author writes this story more on a whim, without much coherent thought behind it. It feels like he just tosses a bunch of information at you at the start of the novel, and then goes off and writes random plot twists dependent on his mood. Characters just perform actions outside of their explained personality, which personally i don't consider character development,character derailment maybe. Way too much time is also spent on random scuffles not really relevant to the story, being labelled as main scenarios, but could honestly be reduced to a chapter or 2 and nothing would change. I think the more egregious thing however is the author biting off more than he can chew. He spends several chapters building up this world based on a potentially predetermined story, and without the readers even knowing much about it, he sets about changing everything. I frankly don't understand setting up this world around certain characters to just add more supposedly, spicing up the novel however I just find it confusing. It's similar to wearing a full suit then just putting on a pair of pink underwear over it for flare, unnecessary. I think trying to add surprising elements to the Mc's background is ok, however shoving it into your face 20 chapters in is just so jarring and such an uncomfortable upset to the pace of the story. It's like if you're reading a novel about killing the demon king, then you spent 20 chapters on stopping some bullying not relevant, 30 chapters on a dungeon that could be 5, meaningless character interactions yes please give me 25, now why don't we make the mc's family secretly demon worshipers and the female lead's family a group of anthropomorphic hamsters, oh wait what was the main goal again, the demon king? The novel is now 100+ chapters and the author is getting tired, demon king is too far away and the hamster arc still needs to be solved, gg go next. If you don't have 600 chapters worth of effort and time to put into a novel, please don't write it as such with so many plot twists and turns before you've even properly started on the main path. Sorry bit of a rant at the end but thanks for reading, even this review could be shorter lol.

Related Stories

Strongest Mage with the Lust system

[ Warning: Mature content R-18 ] Is death a new begining? For Max, it was. Max, a twenty-year-old virgin, got attacked by a bear in forest and died an untimely death. Fortunately for him... that wasn't the end to his story. In the next instant, he found himself transmigrated into the body of a noble's youngest son in a world full of Magic, wonders and... beautiful women. As if God was making up for his untimely death, he also got a system -The Lust System. "I can become stronger just by having sex?" Join the journey of Max and watch he have the time of his life and become the strongest mage the world had ever seen before. ______________________________ [Things to be noted] 1. From the title, you should've guessed it already but let me tell you the story will be filled with many sexual adventures. So... you are welcome to enjoy them..... 2. However... don't expect MC to have sexual relations with every woman he meets. I'll be focusing on the story, and would 'Try' not to blindly throw sex scenes left and right. 3. Most importantly, this is my first time writing so the the quality of first 50 or so may be a bit lacking (But it would cause you no problem if a few minor errors don't bother you). 4. It is a slow paced story. If you want everything to be explosive and fast, maybe this isn't for you. Important Note: If you enjoy the story then don't forget to vote your GTs, Power stones and also if you can, send some GIFTS too. This poor soul would appreciate it. Also check out My other work: [ Rise of the Strongest War God ] & [ My perverted devil system ] Happy reading~ ________________

Blizzard54k · Fantasy
4.5
820 Chs

Re: Evolution Online

On just another normal Monday, a new virtual reality game called "Evolution Online" launched out of nowhere and took the world by storm. People were blown away by the game’s hyper-realistic features and endless adventures. Everyone from small companies to big corporations and governments scrambled to get a foothold on this mysterious video game. But what they didn't know was that this game was actually a tutorial for the upcoming apocalypse that was about to hit the planet! The game was a precursor to the Earth's first evolution, where mana was going to be unleashed into the real world! Liam, a high school student who had faced numerous setbacks in his life, turned to 'Evolution Online' in the hope of changing his fate, but instead, he got trapped in the game's twisted world, and things went from bad to worse. When the apocalypse finally arrived, Liam barely managed to escape, but his situation didn't improve. Along with millions of others, he died a miserable death, unable to fight back and filled with regret. However, Liam's story didn't end there. He found himself inexplicably transported back in time before everything started! Armed with the knowledge of what was to come, Liam was determined to become the strongest and most powerful player, unleashing destruction upon the world that had ruined him before! This time, things were going to be different! ******************* Discord Link for chatting with author and character art https://discord.gg/XS7gWScKn8

Yolohy · Fantasy
4.8
1427 Chs

The Witch Hunter System

Dual cultivation isn't a choice; it's a necessity. After being struck by a truck like most lucky protagonists (or unlucky ones), Vaan found himself transmigrated into the body of an orphan in the world of witches and demons. However, they didn't always exist. Demons terrorized the world ever since the Gehenna Realm descended over 300 years ago. but along with them, came mana, giving birth to witches to combat these demons. Since then, the world of men was dominated by witches, establishing the seven witch kingdoms, which safeguards at the forefront of the demon invasion. In order to survive in the matriarchal society of the witch kingdoms, Vaan, like all other men who cannot use magic, had to learn how to service the witches to survive. Nevertheless, it did not come without its own benefits. Years of research have led the world to the discovery of intimacy between men and women could increase the witches' mana absorption. But at the same time, men could absorb some of this mana to improve their physique and lifespan. Thus, since then, an intricate relationship was formed between men and witches in the red-light districts. Love became casual, and dual cultivation is common. As a prodigy in the art of pleasing women, Vaan lived a smooth two years since his transmigration as an orphan. However, everything came crashing down in a heartbeat one day when his life was nearly taken, and Lady Eniwse whom he served went berserk. Even so, that was not the end. With the awakening of the Witch Hunter System, watch how Vaan takes on the world and becomes the lord of witches. ===== Genre: [Mature Content] [R-18] [Smut] [Magic] [Witches] [Demons] [Spirits] [Dragons] [Beasts] [Reincarnation] [Adventure] [Action] [Mystery] [Academy] [Weak-to-Strong] [Scheming MC] [Harem] [System] [Servants] [Slaves] [Smart MC] [Alchemy] [Forging] [Misunderstandings] [Game Elements] [Kingdom-Building] [Overpowered MC] ===== Note: Contains lemons. Hunting witches does not necessarily imply killing witches, if you know what I mean ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) ===== Feel free to join the discord for novel discussion or grab the novel update role to be notified as soon as new chapters are released in the link below; https://discord.gg/9SUWMPZ ===== My other novels; First novel: Prime Originator (Shared Universe) Second novel: I am a Notorious Boss in the Alternate World (Shared Universe) =====

Pointbreak · Fantasy
4.4
1072 Chs

Lackey's Seducing Survival Odyssey

The world was cruel..... Especially for those who had lost their chances to shine. Aether was one of them.... Born with a golden spoon... yet, he was cast aside like a defective product. He longed for love, for warmth—but all he received was pain. Yet, he smiled, not because he wanted to, but because he had no other choice. With nothing but a broken heart and a hollow laugh, he stepped into the hell called society. "Can't you do a single thing right?!" "…Heh" "You're fired!!!" "…W-Wh…He" "I'm sorry, sir, but you need at least a bachelor's degree to apply." "…I-I am…Heh" "We can’t approve a loan without collateral." "…W-Why?" "Your father’s a politician, right? So, you know…" "…" The so-called society didn't welcome him very well... Yet, He pressed forward! After years of struggle, he finally secured a job—only to be reminded of his place. "Yeah, yeah… I know you got the job thanks to me. So don’t ever contact me or MY parents again," his brother sneered. "...Heh..." And just when he thought he had finally earned a sliver of recognition— "HONK!! HONK!!" Fate was merciless. A split second, a cruel twist, and his already miserable life came to an abrupt end. Yet, as the darkness closed in, he screamed into the void— “I JUST WANT TO LIVE!!!!!” A will that even the universe listened. !~Ding~! Reborn into a new world, Aether thought he had finally been given the chance to truly live. But instead of peace, he found himself in yet another struggle—not just to survive, but against something even more dangerous… Seduction!! Not just any seduction… but a mission to seduce and save the most unattainable women in existence! Seducing the Princess of an Empire! Seducing the Hero’s Mother! Seducing the Villain’s Wife?! ..... ... .. And the list only kept growing… He, a Mere slave, seduces them all.... WHAT KIND OF F## UP LIFE WAS THIS?!! But it wasn’t OVER—far from it.... These women… were even worse!! One wrong move, one careless mistake… and his life could be erased from existence! One thing became painfully clear—if he ever wanted to survive in this hellish world, there was only one path forward. He had to seduce them all. _________________ Release Schedule:- 2 Chapters Every Day! But wait—there’s more! Want extra chapters? Your support makes it happen! Power Stone Rewards: 1- Extra chapter every 500 PS! Golden Ticket Rewards: 100 GT = 2 Extra Chapters For every additional 50 GT, 1 more chapter will be added! If we break into the Top 100, 5 extra chapters will drop as a celebration! Of course, Gifts are also welcomed—every bit of support fuels more chapters and more excitement! Each Magic Castle = 3 Bonus chapters Each Spacecraft = 6 Bonus chapters Each Golden Gachapon = 10 Bonus chapters So, dear readers, rally your stones and tickets—not at me, of course… (Or should I be worried?) Either way—buckle up and enjoy the ride! Discord Server Link: 6JA46z23bw

AbiLIon · Fantasy
4.6
1008 Chs

I Can Copy And Evolve Talents

Across the vast convolution of worlds, divine beings rule as absolute sovereigns—each god assigned dominion over a singular realm. Skirmishes are inevitable, whether for power, amusement, or sheer pettiness. One such battle, between Nexus, the God of Trickery, and an aging, senile deity, resulted in an anomaly… A soul misplaced. Elliot, an ordinary man, was never meant for Ul’Tra-el. But fate, or perhaps a cosmic prank, had other plans. Unlike other worlds, Ul’Tra-el is an aberration—one that developed a voice. A voice that diverged from the natural order. A voice that changed everything. Its foundation cracked, leaking dimensions into one another. Rifts tore open like festering wounds, vomiting forth unspeakable horrors—monsters not meant to exist. But the world did not sit idly by. In response—perhaps an act of self-preservation—the world gifted its inhabitants power. Talents awakened, granting people extraordinary abilities. And for every rift sealed, the Voice of Ul rewarded them generously. Survival was simple: fight, grow stronger, and close the rifts… or die trying. In this ruthless, blood-soaked reality, Northern—a white-haired boy burdened by his past life—was reincarnated. But unlike the chosen heroes, he awakened as a talentless nobody. No power. No strength. No future. And when death loomed over him—when despair clawed at his soul and the cold grip of the failure threatened to take him— A Voice responded: [System Notice] [Your Soul cannot take a form.] [Searching for a Unique Pattern Ability…] [Searching…] [Search Found.] [A Unique System Ability has been detected.] [You Can Copy And Evolve Talents] ... Follow Northern through his journey as he becomes the pinnacle of this world. This a story about a white-haired boy’s rise from rubbles!! Note: This is an overpower genre but MC does not just start off like that. Even though MC can copy talents he doesn't just jump around copying talents because there's a limitation. However, his rise to strength is depicted and is an experience to enjoy. The first few hundreds would be frustrating to follow because MC is weak but that makes the experience all the more interesting when MC finally gets freaking strong and starts wiping the floor with everyones asses.

RighteousFilth · Fantasy
3.7
943 Chs