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2023-11-01 07:22

I haven't read it all yet, but it's amazing. Especially the way you explain it in such detail. However, I think you should pay more attention to the dialogue parts; in my opinion, it's still quite monologous, so I hope you'll provide text for the dialogue. And if possible, lengthen the story in each chapter. Keep up the good work, friend. This novel is truly amazing! 🫸🌟🫷😁

Pixel Pioneers: Forging Dreams in Real Time

Stefano_Filippini
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I'll be honest. This is a fantastic book with great potential. It is a unique story! I think. The author's writing style is impressive and engaging, making it an enjoyable read. I would suggest that the author aims for more consistent chapter releases, preferably one per day (maybe two), to keep readers engaged. The world-building and character design are strong points of the book. However, there is room for improvement in character interactions, as the story sometimes feels more like a personal diary than a dynamic narrative. There is no Dialogue! I started to feel like he didn't talk at all in the story. Despite these minor issues, I appreciate the story and want to support the author in their writing journey. Good Luck!

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Good luck Jason Mitchele [img=recommend] [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Immortal_Gorgan
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Personally I like the way you started. It might not be everybody's cup but it's chill. I see you've released 22 chapters/week. This may be advice coming from an amateur as well, but I suggest you try pacing your releases. Maybe two per day based on reading time of the readers. I might be wrong but.🤗🤗🤗. PS. If anyone would like to exchange genuine reviews and collections hit me up.

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Hello, would you like to exchange reviews with me?

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Yugong
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Good luck Jason Mitchele, I can't wait to follow your journey. :]

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Hello, I am hoping to create a platform for authors and would love for you to join. There is a 70% compensation for authors from all revenue and a contest at my webpage(My username), along with a discord at the bottom of the webpage. I hope to see you there!

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