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2023-09-02 12:19

Avid fan of the author here. I’ve read a bit of this story and I just want to say, it reads like a train wreck. Theres just something wrong about how the sentences are structured and the frequent syntax errors. Im sure the story will be top tier given the authors track record, but unless the writing quality is improved/revised, then its going to be a huge immersion killer.

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Chap 86 review: Really good fanfic, would be top notch if not for the random decision to make the MC "apathetic". In most of his major character interactions with other humans in the the story he actually exhibits the traits of a sociopath, autist, or nempho in random order. Few if any of his thoughts and decisions showcase him as someone with crippling apathy (i.e Lack of emotion, lack of goal-setting, indifference, low energy levels etc). Also not a fan of the whole not wearing clothes shtick he has going on. Choosing to walk around nearly nude and not wanting to wear clothes is more a sign of autism than apathy btw. To make it readable I basically ignore any description of the MC and use my own headcanon of a regular guy who has trouble being polite. Now: Story has become really stale honestly. The character growth is nonexistent tbh. Just when you think theres growth he relapses and finds more reason to commit senseless murder. The world building has also taken a negative turn, the oligarchical system with living embodiments of gods has made this AU so nonsensical I cant stomach it anymore to be honest. Legendaries are known living gods or are treated as such in this story with how much theyve seen them do and yet people still make the idiotic decision to find small things to fight the mc over when they KNOW he has a legendary himself. Then it just repeats. Alongside that he bends over to anyone named Jenny or Joy and ruthlessly slaughters anybody else. Its not apathy, he’s psychotic with extra steps.

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