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2023-08-23 10:31

Okay at first i kinda didn't feel it cause i was only here for Ai, the first 3-4 chapter might be his introduction and he's a Hitman who's also a playboy if I'm not wrong, He saved Ai from the killer which basically made the fanfic already 10/10, Not only that but the update consistency is very good as 1 chap per day which is good and there are barely grammatical errors in my opinion, So far it's a very recommended book for me

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Review made as of chapter 8. Highly recommend reading this. Writing Quality, 4*: The only complaints I have are nitpicks, there are typos here and there, mistakes with English sayings, and the MC has done some things of questionable intelligence but they are things that won't come back to bite him anyways so it's entirely harmless. Some scenes can come off as awkward, but in a charming way that just makes you like the story more. Fantastically written otherwise, eloquent usage of words, and very palatable sentence structure that makes it smooth to read. Stability of Updates, 5*: One chapter every 2 days(ish), written with high-quality, zero complaints here. Story Development, 5*: Paced to my liking and crossovers are intelligently connected into the plotline creating a nice experience while reading. Character Design, 3.5* (rounded to four): The author's OC's are great, though when trying to compare some characters to their counterpart in their respective series' it comes off a little stiff and the experience is much easier if you just treat them like their own character and don't compare them. Considering that point I'm curious as to why the author took the fanfiction route given that this story can stand just fine on it's own two feet. World Background, 5*: Don't quite know how to judge this category all that well but I'll give what I got. The author has done a really good job of meshing the background of the story with the perspectives of the main characters, the world feels like it moves on it's own without them which does a great job at helping your immersion with this story; that is also a massive hurdle for writers to get over I have found so lots of applause there.

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