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LiviceAuthor1yr
2023-09-28 02:23

well well well, I followed the cliche by reviewing my own book

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Argelicano309
Argelicano309Lv12

¿Autor soy yo? o esta novela lo has reescrito ya que me acuerdo de esta novela. Es donde el mc se va en persecución en motocicleta y un carro y disparos? O entre a otro universo xdxd

Brokedepressed
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Will you continue your mahouka fanfic?

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therealet
therealetLv4

Review made as of chapter 8. Highly recommend reading this. Writing Quality, 4*: The only complaints I have are nitpicks, there are typos here and there, mistakes with English sayings, and the MC has done some things of questionable intelligence but they are things that won't come back to bite him anyways so it's entirely harmless. Some scenes can come off as awkward, but in a charming way that just makes you like the story more. Fantastically written otherwise, eloquent usage of words, and very palatable sentence structure that makes it smooth to read. Stability of Updates, 5*: One chapter every 2 days(ish), written with high-quality, zero complaints here. Story Development, 5*: Paced to my liking and crossovers are intelligently connected into the plotline creating a nice experience while reading. Character Design, 3.5* (rounded to four): The author's OC's are great, though when trying to compare some characters to their counterpart in their respective series' it comes off a little stiff and the experience is much easier if you just treat them like their own character and don't compare them. Considering that point I'm curious as to why the author took the fanfiction route given that this story can stand just fine on it's own two feet. World Background, 5*: Don't quite know how to judge this category all that well but I'll give what I got. The author has done a really good job of meshing the background of the story with the perspectives of the main characters, the world feels like it moves on it's own without them which does a great job at helping your immersion with this story; that is also a massive hurdle for writers to get over I have found so lots of applause there.

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