A stupid grim-derp version of bleach that is taking far to long to get anywhere. Given that most fanfics get dropped by cha 100 to 200, the fact that at 50 mc has made what seems like no progress. As for the grim-derp part, I get suspicion at the beginning. But after 50 chap they are still threatening his life. If I was him i would have either killed myself or go live in the forest with the hollows. 0 out of 10, wouldn't read if it was the only bleach fanfic.

Its a soap opera of bleach in book form so if thats your thing cool but this is moving way to slow for me nearly 100 chapters and barely any hint of progress it feels.

I usually don't do this but j got to since its mid and could be better I'm not sure if you know but what you doing is making something en trailing off to a different statement aka place in a time of the novel example is the garden then a paragraph later you say drying in as such they were in a pool or beach Your idea of doing He decided to He want to He needed to as a thought I would stop Because the he thought is bad way of saying it just put the name of the character instead of he him her ETC ALSO tip when having multiple people talk non stop make it so if i-stop make it so if it's an internal thought say [NAME] said internally also it would be good if you set up a normal coverstaion looking/places such as There's useful info “…”= internaly talking example, “of course you would say that” ‘…’= said out loud example [Name] ‘did you know that there are optional classes’ Add more livery when Mc dose it in a conversation Also the location more detailed instead of changing it mid sentence doesn't need to be something good it before scene change have something happen

Hey man, really good job on this story! I really like the character development and the setting in general. I think this book is going to go really far! Cheers man 🍻!

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Idea about his bankai make it so that he can create and manipulate a mirror dimension like Dr strange and can make reflection of his opponents and maybe he can even imitate their abilities

The story is really well written, but the fact that the protagonist has not achieved at least a 3rd seat power in over 140 chapters makes it very boring to read. The original subplot you created is interesting but it also seems too convoluted to finish. Anyway, I will continue reading but not having only small, slow advances in power makes the story very boring.

I prefer this over most stories because this one has a slower pace than most and I don't feel like the Mc makes ridiculous progress immediately.

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