I usually don't do this but j got to since its mid and could be better I'm not sure if you know but what you doing is making something en trailing off to a different statement aka place in a time of the novel example is the garden then a paragraph later you say drying in as such they were in a pool or beach Your idea of doing He decided to He want to He needed to as a thought I would stop Because the he thought is bad way of saying it just put the name of the character instead of he him her ETC ALSO tip when having multiple people talk non stop make it so if i-stop make it so if it's an internal thought say [NAME] said internally also it would be good if you set up a normal coverstaion looking/places such as There's useful info “…”= internaly talking example, “of course you would say that” ‘…’= said out loud example [Name] ‘did you know that there are optional classes’ Add more livery when Mc dose it in a conversation Also the location more detailed instead of changing it mid sentence doesn't need to be something good it before scene change have something happen
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you got the speech reverse '....' for thoughts "...." for speech
