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2024-06-04 23:34

well, I really liked how this story began as it showed a lot of potential, but as story progress, there isn't much development, and the story have stayed away from its initial path, it is really disappointing that such high potential story end up like this

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I like the novel, but it has the same problem that similar novels often face: the main character could theoretically increase his strength at a rapid pace, but he’s held back by one thing: **morality**. His grandmother outright offered to help him earn soul points, but he refused simply because she’s his grandmother. Seriously, that’s frustrating. Because of his moral compass, he’s ignoring opportunities that could potentially save his and his family’s lives. He was told that there are entire organizations stronger than even the empire that has started hunting him, yet he keeps making foolish decisions that could prove fatal. One such decision is his failure to make a soul contract with the branch of his family he discussed overthrowing the empire with. It’s foolish—he’s been betrayed twice already, but it seems he hasn’t learned anything from those experiences. Also, this idiot isn’t even trying to track down his former friend who betrayed and killed him, even though that same friend knows about the artifact. His wife also told him there’s a high chance that people will hunt him for it. On top of that, Alexander's previous soul specifically asked him to take care of the children he had with that same friend’s wife, to prevent that friend from killing them too, but he hasn’t even thought about them yet. It’s also frustrating how he went against his entire family over the maid. It’s irrational to oppose those who are supposed to accept you as their leader for such a reason. If he had simply removed her from her position as a maid and taken her as a concubine, it would have been understandable. However, the way he handled the situation only highlighted his lack of necessity and impulsiveness. For God’s sake, he’s 60 years old in Alexander’s body and also about 30 years old as Jack, meaning he has lived for a total of 90 years. Yet he still doesn’t demonstrate a satisfactory level of maturity, despite spending many years at war.

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