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Uhh, yeah. I hate to be the one doing this, but this fanfic... well, there's very little point in reading it. The content of the first 10 chapters or so (maybe more, but I didn't read further) is plain repetition of the previous chapters. The same content, the same format, the same formula, with just the topic being different. I can even see the pattern here: Mc is talented --> Mc learns a new thing --> Mc makes great progress in new thing --> People are in awe. Basically just that. In fact, there several words such as "grace" and "ethereal" which have been repeated so much that I noticed it despite not actively looking and trying to dissect the fanfic. Also, the reader feels extremely detached to the mc because, well, we know nothing about him asides from the fact that he is talented. We never see him conversing normally (day to day interactions), we never know his likes and dislikes, we can't see and feel what he's thinking, etc. Basically, the mc feels like an emotionless machine. I don't know about others, but I find him quite boring and basically skimmed over the remaining chapters. Asides from that, the grammar is solid and you'll find no mistakes there. At least I found none.

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Thank you for bringing this feedback to my attention. It serves as a valuable insight for refining and improving future narratives in the story.