Definitely needs an editor. it's hard to read when every sentence has an error or two, it really breaks you out of the immersion. I think the idea is cool, but very poorly executed. it reads like a synopsis, which is disappointing. The characters are pretty poorly written, most acting very out of character or not developed in the slightest. Given a quick info dump on who they are, isn't development. You might as well slap an OC in there, call her ino, and have her say nothing but exposition, and it would still be a more developed character than what you've got.

just another chat gpt generated story mixed with a few badly written pharagraphs....you can clearly see the diference between pharagraphs with good grammar and structure but no meaning to them and pharagraphs with bad writing quality but truing to convey something....

I've reed your Minato and dragon ball fic hopefully you have done some really in depth research before you started this5* for now will change once 10 chapters have come out

As always your novels is the best, I've always like your minato template novels for its's way of fighting and here you give us one more masterpiece with good story. I have a question who will be the female lead

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Love so much i love how smart the mc is and how he works hard i hope his team improves soon ino and choji needs to improve and imagine all the cool combinations they can make new ino-shika-cho combos

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