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cantstopme
cantstopmeLv11yr
2023-09-17 14:48

Great story of underdog. Really like how the MC is weak and becomes strong. Please continue writing, really like your work. Wish that he'd get even stronger.

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Dreadfiend
DreadfiendLv13

Please try out my first work as an Author : Supreme Warlock: New Order in the Apocalypse. Genre: Romance, System, Tragedy, Dark, Evolution It is free to read as I am yet to apply for contract. The thing is that I have only started 3 days ago but I have uploaded my first 21 chapters and I am waiting for responses from vet readers like you to get their critics and thoughts. Thank you and please give it a chance

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3K_2
3K_2Lv2

the story is the typical weak to strong attempt, keyword attempt, because this genre usually tries to add in a sense of realness to it, thus the story either ends being really good or the lowest form of trash possible that makes it unreadable. The mc at the start is weaker than an average normal human on basically all parameters and he doesnt even have mana, yet despite being weaker than you and I he somehow managed to get in a school for super humans... how you may ask? no reason lol, he doesnt even have any sort of connection, money or academic ability, but its not like this author cares about logic, thus this story fails right at chapter 1. Anyways I didnt start reading this expecting a masterpiece so I preserved and turned a blind eye to all the stupidity and cliches right till (spoiler) the classic girl turned into a vampire arc cus vampires are cool and edgy, this arc was just too stupid and braindead to the point that I cant endure this torture anymore -_- in this arc the author went way out of his way to break the already almost non existent logic in this story, from mc letting villains injure him because a demon is seeing through them? although this was not an issue with the other villains who are even ranked higher, but if he didnt get injured the random vampire wouldnt have found his blood on the street to get a power up for by licking the blood that is somehow still fresh and get the power to turn magical girl into a vampire -_- summary: typical trash story that pretends to not be a trash story, so it doesnt offer any sort of enjoyment. And to the author if youre reading this please find another career this is really not it -_-

GeneralDeFartos_L
GeneralDeFartos_LLv4

I read about 300 chapters. I just wanted to drop it multiple times throughout my reading, but I thought it will get better, so I hung around longer, but it didn't get better. ------------------- Here's the good parts of the story: - Author takes new approaches to the typical reincarnated into a game scenario. It's not just someone died and poof he's inside a game world. Also, a lot of events are properly thought out (no stealing opportunities, no utilizing future knowledge to steal from auction...etc. you know, the typical stuff you see in other works). - MC has a purpose and drive. He doesn't just want to exploit the game and get stronger for flimsy reasons. He an extreme revenge type of dude, which I like. - Characters have variety and each has a set personality and growth. ----------------------- Here's the problem with the story: - Main problem: Writing a lot of useless words and adding a lot of flowery words. Author might think that these set the atmosphere and make for nice writing, but honestly it's distracting and makes it over the top. especially when even characters talk in this over the top flowery language, like when professor Eleanor briefed students about the test. [Examples: "the rustling of leaves seems to whisper secrets and warnings" - "forming a chorus of anguish" - "a symphony of terror that pierced the darkness" - " thanks to the enhanced boots" - "this alone showed how much potential.." - "it was evident that.."....etc] All these are added in paragraphs of action disrupting the flow of battle, or when there's no combat, then it's just an attempt at using beautiful language, but it's just cringy and tiring to read. _________ Author could take a couple of points from korean novels, they don't add unnecessary expanding nor describe things in flowery words. ___________ - Another problem is that the story is dull and got more boring with each following arc. Honestly the first arc was the best one, despite the overly flowery words and cringy talks between characters, the story itself had a clear direction. The following arcs are bland. For example the latest arc I read, they went to phantoms land, however it didn't feel like there was a build up nor a climax, even the reward after everything was done was underplayed and felt boring despite the big power up. ____________ - Now my final problem with the story: It didn't feel like we went anywhere, the story almost feels stagnant, even though the timeline moved forward and the MC got stronger, I see no immediate goal in sight. Here's how things will unfold with this story: MC trains > gets stronger > gets shoved in event > fights something > gets power up > trains > event > power up.. .etc. That's how it happened in all 300 chapters and that's how it'll be going forward, it's bland and boring. Do you know why other stories with a similar set up are more appealing? It because characters have long term goals (which is present here "revenge") and they have short term goals. MC here doesn't have short term goals nor any desires. He hates demons with a passion, so it should be reasonable for him to have goals like to brutally scheme against anything demonic and go DOOM mode on them. But we don't see that, the dude just gets shoved into situations that have demons and he defeats them. Demons come to him, not the other way.

TheOneTrueLoki
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