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DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv149mth
2024-03-04 22:23

The MCs origin is unique but overall very cliche when it comes to the outcome. MC is supposed to be chill and laid back in this life but then goes around considering if he's going to kill innocent teenage girls. he says to put them out of their misery... or you could you know stop the abuse and let them live full lives. MC seems to be all over the place. Story isn't bad but there is no rhyme or rhythm to the MC or the plot.

Twilight: The Heavenly Demon

tikuskecetit
3.1
50 Chs

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Kirozen
KirozenLv4

That's disappointing considering he is a cultivator. He doesn't seem to be a cultivator with that kind of views I mean his mindset is that of a mortal than an immortal who thinks like this.

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tikuskecetit
tikuskecetitAuthor

Fixed some things and hope you enjoyed it

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CloudSmoke
CloudSmokeLv5

Traaaaash actually just pure unadulterated garbage

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The_HeavenlyDemon
The_HeavenlyDemonLv14

I mean he lived a whole life in a murim world, became stronger than everyone, got dic slapped to another world by a protagonist, but he doesn’t have that heavenly demon rizz. Just a regular guy not affected by decades of danger and betrayal he even died a couple times(immortal apparently). No faceslapping yet. Might as well have made him go to a regular fantasy world where all the beta Mc’s go. Has good potential, but potential means nothing when it’s not utilized. Anyways I’ll keep reading mabye it gets better 😃

7mth
Red_Spice
Red_SpiceLv4

It’s such a cringe that it’s hard to tell… [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

9mth
Jake_Donaldson
Jake_DonaldsonLv1

Reveal spoiler

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Fatbastard03
Fatbastard03Lv2

Honestly it ain’t too bad. Just could use more frequent updates and some better writing. But if you don’t have much else to read then this is decent

1mth
Asta_4626
Asta_4626Lv11

meh meh there is not much this story does from other Twilight novels ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________-__

6mth
Jackleell
JackleellLv1

Writing Quality: Good Stability of Updates: 11 months for 46 chapters Story Development: The MC follows the plot. Character Design: The MC doesn't know whether to act like a normal human or a psychopath. And don't get me started with that love destiny stuff from Twilight. Overall, his character is all over the place. World Background: It's just Earth. There is no world background, no exploring the mystery of where the vampires or werewolves come from, etc.

6mth
SuohDaoist
SuohDaoistLv13

Warning it's another Alice pairing with a supposedly mature mc who once again is forced to be smitten cause some destiny mate bs.

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