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TimTere
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2023-09-07 10:45

I’m loving the novel so far, but as with dragon monarch systems most recent chapters I feel the description of some things is overdone leading some chapters being majorly dedicated to just describing something. Which is ok so we can clearly picture it even though we’re not there, but I feel it slows down the development of the story itself.

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