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Slyca
SlycaLv31yr
2023-07-04 13:10

Really liked the premise. It's normal not anything extraordinary but still it is good. The very first chapter was way too short which might make some readers not want to read the fan-fic as a whole. Also please don't do harem and genderbend. These two sucks and also please don't make way too many Ocs and please no hiruzen bashing but still writing is good. Hope you don't drop this!

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Palpable_Banana
Palpable_BananaAuthor

Thanks. I don't plan on any genderbends. Hiruzen will not be bashed either. I'm still not even sure if I'm adding romance, much less a harem.

Random_exe
Random_exeLv13

Man what you are saying right now sounds almost like a fantasy 💀, pretty hard to find a naruto ff in this app without harem and bashing the miserable old man

Palpable_Banana:Thanks. I don't plan on any genderbends. Hiruzen will not be bashed either. I'm still not even sure if I'm adding romance, much less a harem.
Daoist_Dan
Daoist_DanLv10

Yes, and a Dumbledore who isn't bashed for being manipulative and evil.

Random_exe:Man what you are saying right now sounds almost like a fantasy 💀, pretty hard to find a naruto ff in this app without harem and bashing the miserable old man
Daoist_Dan
Daoist_DanLv10

Tbh not ever story needs romance. I think your character is strong enough and the story has plenty action that it would feel like things are being derailed. Just my opinion though.

Palpable_Banana:Thanks. I don't plan on any genderbends. Hiruzen will not be bashed either. I'm still not even sure if I'm adding romance, much less a harem.
Random_exe
Random_exeLv13

Ikr

Daoist_Dan:Yes, and a Dumbledore who isn't bashed for being manipulative and evil.
Random_exe
Random_exeLv13

I second that , romance isn’t really needed

Daoist_Dan:Tbh not ever story needs romance. I think your character is strong enough and the story has plenty action that it would feel like things are being derailed. Just my opinion though.
BoredCrow
BoredCrowLv4

You forgot to add the plan to save the Uchiha which is somehow in all of the naruto fanfics.

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