I could make it 23 chapters in before I tapped out, I have seen this fic a lot and sometimes I’m interested enough to see what is written and it says I can continue for chapter two, but idr so I reread it, get to the place where the mc says the gamer word and back out, this time I tried to move past it cause who knows? Maybe the author will get better like some reviews hinted at, but it doesn’t, the sense of space is terrible, people will walk up to people’s faces, monologue, then walk up to that same person’s face, people will be hidden in a graveyard watching the mc, mc will be four years old, go to tsunade’s 2nd birthday party, at the end of the chapter there is a foot note that that chapter is a flashback but not specify time, and at chapter 19 it is revealed mc and tsunade are the same age, there are weird mental gymnastics involved so that the mc does not want to train in the martial arts that makes garou garou, I predict the list goes on but I cba
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i researched and there was not a specific time about when was tsunade's birthday where hashirama is still alive, and what timeline ? there is no solid timeline in the naruto world, i specified the timeline in the form of hinting, for ex/ someone like the kazekage shamon and the young raikage Ay or the sannins who are still kids, the timeline right now is 12 years before the second shinobi world war which it means no minato, pain, or whatever. ..and the reason why the mc doesn't use the OG Garou's martial arts is just because he doesn't want it to be copied with some sharingan or some mean which he will soon enough find out the solution for it ( he fought with the water stream martial arts in his latest fight with someone but unfortunately you didn't read about to find out ). ..as for the monologues and dialogues, i don't have any excuses for that, you are right but that's the best i could do, maybe i can improve it but it will take some time .
No I mean, when I read the birthday flashback, I did not know how old the mc was until chapter 20, I thought he was older than tsunade till that point, second, that sharingan thing is not the reason given, mc says smthn about how it’s pointless to train in something that will be given by the template, then you clarify in the comments that the template is one that gives % through life experiences as if training in the martial art is not a life experience
The_Zen_Boy:i researched and there was not a specific time about when was tsunade's birthday where hashirama is still alive, and what timeline ? there is no solid timeline in the naruto world, i specified the timeline in the form of hinting, for ex/ someone like the kazekage shamon and the young raikage Ay or the sannins who are still kids, the timeline right now is 12 years before the second shinobi world war which it means no minato, pain, or whatever. ..and the reason why the mc doesn't use the OG Garou's martial arts is just because he doesn't want it to be copied with some sharingan or some mean which he will soon enough find out the solution for it ( he fought with the water stream martial arts in his latest fight with someone but unfortunately you didn't read about to find out ). ..as for the monologues and dialogues, i don't have any excuses for that, you are right but that's the best i could do, maybe i can improve it but it will take some time .
no, training in martial arts is not a life experience when it was already experienced by the OG garou, i made the template so that with challenges of life he could increase it, even though training could increase it but it's not that much because what's after a training is really challenging than the training itself. well, things like getting enlightenment in his training will sure increase it but enlightenment is no something anyone snd anytime someone could achieve it.... and bro no offense, but i don't think you read the chapters that carefully to realise how old the MC is because there were some time skips that were mentioned in the paragraphs and things that you may have missed.
Bloob:No I mean, when I read the birthday flashback, I did not know how old the mc was until chapter 20, I thought he was older than tsunade till that point, second, that sharingan thing is not the reason given, mc says smthn about how it’s pointless to train in something that will be given by the template, then you clarify in the comments that the template is one that gives % through life experiences as if training in the martial art is not a life experience
Does he have the experience of garou or not, if he doesn’t then training will give him the experience of garou which he doesn’t have, if he does, he could easily reach enlightenment, second a two year time skip, then a couple months, turning four, going to a birthday, revealing that was in the past, but it was a connected story to the previous chapter, is the mc 6 or 4 now, when he was like “when I saw hashirama” was that him as a 4 year old reminiscing or him leaving a footnote while in the present like he has done before and he is 6 now that hashirama is dead
The_Zen_Boy:no, training in martial arts is not a life experience when it was already experienced by the OG garou, i made the template so that with challenges of life he could increase it, even though training could increase it but it's not that much because what's after a training is really challenging than the training itself. well, things like getting enlightenment in his training will sure increase it but enlightenment is no something anyone snd anytime someone could achieve it.... and bro no offense, but i don't think you read the chapters that carefully to realise how old the MC is because there were some time skips that were mentioned in the paragraphs and things that you may have missed.
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Bloob:Does he have the experience of garou or not, if he doesn’t then training will give him the experience of garou which he doesn’t have, if he does, he could easily reach enlightenment, second a two year time skip, then a couple months, turning four, going to a birthday, revealing that was in the past, but it was a connected story to the previous chapter, is the mc 6 or 4 now, when he was like “when I saw hashirama” was that him as a 4 year old reminiscing or him leaving a footnote while in the present like he has done before and he is 6 now that hashirama is dead
