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AdEpTuS_GoD
AdEpTuS_GoDLv131yr
2023-08-19 04:48

Issues with the fixAwful grammer. I wanted to stop reading it but I still endured and read it for the sake of a review. If you want to make an MC OP then do it right. Don't make it weak after giving him the bloodline (no spoiler just think of the strongest bloodline in the story) and make him weak. You put too much unnecessary details and stretch useless fights. I wanted to stop cuz of the grammer, it's a huge red flag for me. Character design is MEH. Story development is MEH. World background is One Piece so imma give it 3 stars would have given it 5 stars if you did a good job that you didn't. You didn't put much effort into character details nor into the system descriptions. Its lousy writinhg.Compliment Story is not bad but I don't think you can read with the issues in grammer. Like I have read soo many fics I have like a certain requirement. i need good grammer.Hire someone to proofread and edit.

OnePiece! Ninja Gacha System

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3.8
51 Chs

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DaoistdAPAxL
DaoistdAPAxLLv4

Very inconsistent For a character with a template similar to Kaguya's people he's pathetically weak and the chakra level makes no sense for someone with that kind of power. Jackpot? More like a crackpot. 😔. In the words of the mighty Jiren the Grey. "What a disappointment, I expected more from you."

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_JMR_
_JMR_Lv14

Sigh... another fic with awful grammar. Well, this time I forgot to read the synopsis and regretted it instantly. So... here I am and might as well leave a review. With sentences like "the man inside the dark room name was Rei, he suffers from allbinism for 25 years since childhood, his skin is pure white and his long hair isn't even dark colored one just like most common people had, the worst thing was he couldn't step outside under the sun for risk of skin" you can see how hard it would be to read this story. I can't believe, that people would enjoy reading this. You really need a better translator (I guess), but the idea itself it not bad.

1yr
Legion_Yui
Legion_YuiLv1

Do not listen to the bad reviews, I really like the story and how it unfolds. pdt: Use translator. No hagas caso a las malas críticas me gusta la historia y como se desenvuelve sigue así.

1yr
Artoriapendraragon
ArtoriapendraragonLv14

like always it a decent read for me.....

1yr
Shi_Wu
Shi_WuLv4

mc isnt op but pretty balanced, system isnt retardet and make some sense, good writing skills

1yr
Armando_Bronca
Armando_BroncaLv3

Putting powers from other worlds in One Piece is an insult, as if OP didn't have devil fruits with crazy powers to make an entertaining story

1yr
Brwaa_Nihad
Brwaa_NihadLv4

I love this fanfic I need moreeee the idea of a ninja system in one piece got me hooked immediately

1yr
Scaryface131
Scaryface131Lv4

Capitalize the first letter of a paragraph!

1yr
Andrey_Play
Andrey_PlayLv4

(^_^)

1yr
DefeatedNinth_LRNS
DefeatedNinth_LRNSLv13

I loved the development, the character and his personality, I look forward to what this character can tell me! world apart like a fanfic, this interaction of the world is left to the author's hand.

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