The background is great for this sort of story. The characters are well designed though I would recommend a bit more description of how they look just to give immersion a bit more of a boost. The updates are steady and the writing is very good. I noticed description here in neat places like of what juices the characters like to drink and of what the background looks like. That still puts description in this story above what I usually see. The grammar is mainly good but there are some minor gripes I have with it. Most of which I only see in the first chapter. For instance, "5year" is written instead of "5 year". The number should at least be spaced out from the word. With that being said, this is a high-quality novel that you can get access to FOR FREE. I recommend it. To the writer: I welcome you to have a look at "Avatar: Lingering Tensions" (ALT) which is a sequel to "Avatar: Macai's Journey" (AMJ). You may want to read the first chapter of AMJ or so to get a feel for what the first story was about. But AMJ's tone changes so much that you really won't know everything unless you read a lot of it. Still, the story is written in a way that explains the essentials. It also is better if you've watched the canon motherseries "Avatar: The Last Airbender". Cheers!
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First and foremost, thank you so much for taking the time to read my novel & to leave me a wonderful review! I'd like to clarify that "5year" is correct as it is the name of the group. Also, author, it's considered to be rude/in poor taste to leave a recommendation for your novel on other author's reviews/in their comments. Other authors will be very upset with you for that and delete your review. Please refrain from doing such a thing in the future. If you want to promote your novels, please use your social media platforms, forums or discord promotional sections if the servers you're in have any. Good luck!
