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2023-07-10 18:02

Oh, review for first 10 chapters! This was such a great start. I didn't expect that I will be this intrigued by the world of idols and it's tosses and turns. I could feel the hard work put into this from the author to which I say, good job! The characters are great, they feel real and fleshed out with their own goals and motives for their actions. The world is modern earth from what I can see but still could be worked on to show a different way the idol world would've affected it. The story development although slow, isn't by any means heavy or daunting to read. However, there are also cons: the structure of the pargraphs is kind of out of the norm compared to normal WN books. There is more dialogue then necessary in some parts which might make it feel like a movie script rather than a book.All in all, this book is a great read and I look forward to more chapters. Will keep an eye on it :)

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