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Lazren_Inkheart
Lazren_InkheartLv141yr
2023-07-20 23:35

I've recently read all of your fics besides the dropped one, and honestly, this is the one I liked the least. I just can't get over the reactions or, more accurately, non-reactions of everyone to his eating people. Maybe if the setting was after Endgame, you could somewhat believe it, but at this point in the timeline, the reactions seem completely out of character. Honestly, with the reincarnation part at the start of the fic, if you just make it something like, people are more inclined to be accepting of his abilities. Although it would be hamfisted, it makes more sense.Honestly, that's the only problem. Grammatically, there's basically no issues. The writing style is very engaging, and character work outside of the above-mentioned problem is really good. While there are obvious wish fulfilment aspects, that's true in any fanfic, and here it's done in a really readable and digestible manner. Overall, it's very good and you're a good author because I like your other works even better. The only other possible note is to be careful of burnout it looks like you're updating 4 stories at the moment, and while as reader, I love all the content, trust me as an audience we much prefer slower updates and less stressed author that completes their work, than one who uploades until they can't and then stops posting altogether.Take care of yourself.

Monstrous Hero (Fan-fic with same name will be my future upload source

Ravven2769
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Thanks for the support and the detailed and valid suggestions, I'll take your advice to better adapt it for re-reading and new readers.

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Now updated

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TinyBookDragon
TinyBookDragonLv4

A fun read if a bit unrealistic on people's reactions to the MC needing to eat people. I know this isn't DC where killing is a big nono but I feel like the Avengers took it a bit casually.

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Nevermindthename
NevermindthenameLv14

So much for talking about Batman's dedication to keeping his identity secret and choosing the willpower option. Besides your scene transitions are abrupt. End previous scene with some finality. Ease into new scenes properly. The way it is, it takes a moment to realise that previous scene has ended. There's too much tell and no show, no descriptions of surroundings to give a picture of what's happening, no describing (subtly, being obvious as describing angry, happy etc is again all tell and no show) character expressions. It's all I did this, then did that. Just stuffing the reader with it. Expound more, let readers make sense of what's happening from the text. Need to work on dialogues as well. Dialogues should give us an inkling of characters, their thought process, personality. The dialogues here are just present for the sake of it.

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1stDrunkenImmortal
1stDrunkenImmortalLv14

👍👍👍👍👍. I like it

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khazar
khazarLv5

this is quite prefect a prefect pace but it has some illogical reaction At least on Peter and aunt may side but ever thing else is great

1yr
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