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GodOfLight
GodOfLightLv11yr
2023-07-05 00:53

well definitely not my cup of coffee, writing quality and grammar is quite ok. story development is boring it's not a character driven plot but also not a plot driven character and made think what is this story trying to do, and I still has no clue. author attempt at "character development" is cliche and poorly executed. the way the mc act before and after "the event" is pretty much the same that makes the event quite useless and not needed and the way things are going makes the plot progression feel forced and not natural. world background is poorly represented. this review is probably biased since I don't like hows the story progressing but I wish the author develop the character in other way since it's easily predictable. I wish the author the best in their future endeavors

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