Rough start but can improve. I will probably remember this novel for a long time since it has one of the worst ways i’ve sern to force a plot. Secondly there is a massive red flag where the mc does the low-key trope. If I read a young master novel its because im tired of those overused and boring tropes, so author you should think about it bery carefully
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LIKEIt was the bet between mc and the girl he needs to kill, the way you forced the mc to participate in the trial left a bad taste in my mouth. If that was your goal then you could have achieved it in a less convoluted way. I dont enjoy things that get overcopmlicated for no apparent reason, but thats a personal taste.
I do agree somewhat. Though the goal was the bet. I might actually need to polish that chapter. Any suggestions?
I haven't read your novel, yet, but I do like it when authors actively ask for feedback instead of fighting every reader who has a critique, so I will offer a suggestion as someone who is tired of reading clichés and other irritating tropes: Readers usually hate it when something is inexplicably forced on the MC and with good reason. If you need something to happen, then make it the MC's goal or make him WANT that to happen. Readers love a proactive MC and hate a passive MC who just gets swept along by the plot. That's why you can't ever go wrong with making the MC pursue his goals.