Look Elyon, I liked your book ( the necromancer one ) but I think you have an issue. Now I will give you credit where it is due, in my relatively short time here, on this app, you are one of the better writers here but you have a huge problem with openings. I don't think I am really qualified to judge you since I only read one of your books but still your openings don't really hook people in. Secondly, this wasn't an issue before but it seems like you're rushing, i don't know why you're doing this (even though I have a hypothesis ) but take your time, give us a good and stable setup for an equivalent story. But be warned don't let it turn into an expositionary sludge fest. I mean keep good pace. And I don't know your personal reason for your naming convention but try something a bit more pleasing to say. Accept that, you are good. You tell stories I can enjoy so 👍. N: Hope this has a good spin on it and sorry for the low rating but in some aspects the start out is lacking.
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LIKEI can't believe I wrote accept instead of except 😭
Read the 1st chapter of "Reincarnated with the Strongest System" and tell me if that opening isn't good. Also, I didn't write this story. It's a collaboration work with another author.
A Collab? Okay then. And the opening? Okay maybe everyone else liked it and it's just me who didn't. Sorry if this didn't help you.
It's fine. We can't please everybody.
your both novel's opening are good but the new novel kingdom building done right is cliche novel I have read 2 novels with similar staring and story.
I wasn't the one that wrote it. it was a collaboration work with another authohr.
