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2023-11-26 01:30

The story feels very underwhelming; most interactions feel unrealistic. Additionally, the English not being good just adds to the incongruity of the book. If the author really wants to improve, he/she should picture his/her own interactions with people and ponder if the ones present in the book feel normal. The MC also heavily lacks initiative/focus, even after understanding his ability somewhat and how to progress it. Anyways, good luck improving.

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I’m having so much fun with this one! Currently at about chapter 95, so time for a review. Absolutely love the lore of the world, especially as the characters leave the opening setting and venture out. It’s interesting and unique, and a great backdrop to a variety of adventures. Especially with all the creatures. MC starts out with no particular grand ambition beyond pursuing his archeological dream, but he quickly gets wrapped up in more than he bargained for and becomes a reluctant hero. He obviously changes as the plot progresses. His archeology background becomes key to solving mysteries, more a brain-over-brawn beginning then evolving into a more powerful character. I also find MC’s system very clever and exceptionally appropriate for this story. I like that it isn’t just a screen interface. Lots of potential while still having enough limitations to keep things interesting. Side characters have distinctive personalities. Several mysteries are set there that I’m waiting to read more about… The main group is kind of a band of misfits. They feel unique, and I like the bond they form and the ways they interact. Be sure you read far enough to let the characters settle in to their roles. In terms of writing, I have no problem feeling the atmosphere and emotions, visualizing the scenes, characters, creatures, etc… I think the author writes in a way that paints an accurate image without being overly descriptive or wordy. And the action scenes are easy to follow. All in all, definitely recommend! Thanks for the adventure!

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