Item: The Golem Mage
Rating: 2
Author: SaysMe

SaysMeLv151yr

2023-11-17 15:27

Writing at the start is rough , really rough. Stuck through it as there are edits here and there that hint at better writing to come. What killed it for me though was the character progression. Just jumps all over thr place and really killed the enjoyment for me. I really wanted to like this book as the premise seems great but the execution really doesn’t make this worth reading. And certainly not worth using stones on.

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