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GreedyHuman
GreedyHumanLv111yr
2023-05-15 22:02

Overall, the writing quality is good, and I didn't come across any noticeable mistakes. The story development is great, and the pace is well balanced. There is a potential for further improvement and growth. The main character (MC) is likable, and the interactions between the MC and their future harem are cute. The world background has enough details to provide a solid foundation. Regarding the updating stability, I would give it a 5-star rating for now. In terms of evaluation, the story is fantastic and well balanced, showing a lot of potential. However, I found the chapters to be too long. It would be better if they were shorter, perhaps around 1.5k to 2k words. Please note that I will provide a more detailed review once the story reaches 15 chapters. For now,enjoy this AI-generated image that I have created for you

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Addyctive7
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Thanks for the review. I appreciate it. This is the first time I’m seeing someone complaining about having longer chapters… I usually only write chapters between 1500 to 2000 words but the prologue was much longer since I had to add many details. You can expect a general trend of that many words as the chapter length. Of course there might be an occational extra long chapter.

My_Games
My_GamesLv4

Pengamat_Ketiga
Pengamat_KetigaLv11

her image reminds me of Ais wallenstein (danmachi) with red hair

DragonkingKyo
DragonkingKyoLv6

how did the author make Rias is he one of the ones that make her a bad dumb girl(as in is he a Rias hater) unlike what she is in the novel?

Deep_Pal_2626
Deep_Pal_2626Lv14

No she's a love interest yet MC's cousin. (ㆁᴗㆁ✿)

DragonkingKyo:how did the author make Rias is he one of the ones that make her a bad dumb girl(as in is he a Rias hater) unlike what she is in the novel?
DaoistmXBnrL
DaoistmXBnrLLv4

will they be in the harem?

Addyctive7:Thanks for the review. I appreciate it. This is the first time I’m seeing someone complaining about having longer chapters… I usually only write chapters between 1500 to 2000 words but the prologue was much longer since I had to add many details. You can expect a general trend of that many words as the chapter length. Of course there might be an occational extra long chapter.
Daoist4MxvaV
Daoist4MxvaVLv13

Bro they are related

DaoistmXBnrL:will they be in the harem?
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