Be Warn! you will see - Thick **ck** - Big Black **ck - Ferocious big **ck - Dark big **ck - Vainy ****š Overused of these kinds of words ..no need to mention it every time. Perspective/Point of view is confusing. From one sentence or paragraph, somehow you can tell that the "MC" is talking, next moment is author or narrator, next moment is the "MC Mother". From 1st person (MC view by using I, me, etc), to 2nd person (like MC knows what his mother is thinking by being her, whereas the mother while she being herself but also the narrator) to 3rd person (Author/Narrator is describing what the mother doing or what will occurs etc) and then maybe 4th person (telling or informing the reader of what the outcome is). I don't know how to explain it, just by reading it just doesn't feel like a written novel but more you telling a story of how a son want to get laid with his mother. I assume (Yes, you read it correctly, im making an Ass-u-(n)me) the MC and family is Chinese background. Really, where does the BIG Thick Black Dark Ferocious vainy D**K/C**K come from. I'm a male. Even though I'm not Chinese descent, it's not Black either. Try to use different words other than masturbate, masturbating, masturbation or you can use it in normal context. Anyway, I hope this counts as a review, š š¤£ š Keep up the good work.
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