stop with the *Ding*...use brackets better then ding this ding that.

ace?

not cough, is ahh choo or sneeze something like that

to the author... the words mourn and mourning are for something else. Here, you need to use moan, moaning as in making lewd noises

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I'm not sure if I miss it (info about Divine Lake). how long are they down there for? do they need air? don't they need to breathe?ty for your hard work!!

thx for the chapter, keep up the good work!!

7 weapons maybe with 7 "royal" or nobility families

Meanwhile, Sephie or "Sophie" is only worth a few silver coins

I would appreciate it more if you paragraph it out, making it easier to read. Capitalisation and well other things. I basically ZOOM pass all the words, and you will understand it allGuy dies.Transmigrate, take over a "trashy" young master, in a Sect full of "perverts" hahaReceived a system to help him grow, and about this point, almost every "females" being used or used goods.Too bad ratings can't be updated? or can it. Anyway, read it as it is, or you be mind break

hid = himhim = her?

head or hand?

remove release your x1

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ock = missing a c

I know we have hairs and stuff, but if you keep calling it hairy legs, why not make him an chimpanzees lol...even though I have hairs...it aren't what you called HAIRY Legs, just saying

Sura = Ursa

I am quite curious. Before this, you mentioned he is sitting down now. Here, you also mentioned she is sitting down. How is it possible for both to perform this act?

Be Warn! you will see - Thick **ck** - Big Black **ck - Ferocious big **ck - Dark big **ck - Vainy ****😜 Overused of these kinds of words ..no need to mention it every time. Perspective/Point of view is confusing. From one sentence or paragraph, somehow you can tell that the "MC" is talking, next moment is author or narrator, next moment is the "MC Mother". From 1st person (MC view by using I, me, etc), to 2nd person (like MC knows what his mother is thinking by being her, whereas the mother while she being herself but also the narrator) to 3rd person (Author/Narrator is describing what the mother doing or what will occurs etc) and then maybe 4th person (telling or informing the reader of what the outcome is). I don't know how to explain it, just by reading it just doesn't feel like a written novel but more you telling a story of how a son want to get laid with his mother. I assume (Yes, you read it correctly, im making an Ass-u-(n)me) the MC and family is Chinese background. Really, where does the BIG Thick Black Dark Ferocious vainy D**K/C**K come from. I'm a male. Even though I'm not Chinese descent, it's not Black either. Try to use different words other than masturbate, masturbating, masturbation or you can use it in normal context. Anyway, I hope this counts as a review, 😆 🤣 😂 Keep up the good work.

her = my?