So far reading to chapter 19 you’ve set a good pace for the development of the story. As far as the world goes from the transition between it’s pretty good, so far it’s focused on the palace which is where he would get all his powers before going to explore the world he’s in I assume. [To explain the world he’s in maybe have it explained by the people he’s going to go against in the palace]~Just a suggestion. Overall as a system story you’w made it in a unique and interesting way! Keep up the good work!!!🫡✊
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