Review Detail of Senpai_Baka in Talk About Life in a Parallel World

The synopsis seems ok and the First line in the Novel. You do a lot of unnecessary skipping lines in the Novel, like there's no paragraph just sentence ( i don't know if that's the Aim but yeah), Also you use the quotation mark not so well, at the very beginning you used them just fine, but then you started using the dash thing (hypen, i think ) and you should write the speech in quotation and then put the person speaking on the outside. This is Opinion anyway