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2023-06-06 22:30

i am currently on chapter 9 but so far it seems to follow the style as the anime with the splicing of events between pat and future in which i sincerely hope that it becomes more focused in future chapters and quits with constant pov changes

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✨Review After 10 chapters✨ ⭐️Writing Quality⭐️ [4 STARS] The writing quality certainly is good but it can’t be perfect, so I pretty much always give a 4 star in all stories I make a review on. Anyway, it isn't unreadable, as it’s actually pretty good, though you might have confused some less endowed readers (not me though) when you changed the POV without mentioning it but I saw that you already fixed that so yeah…, you will get better the more you write after all 👀 👍 👏 ⭐️Updating Stability⭐️ [4 STARS] You’ve been updating regularly but like it has been the case in this week, it could happen that you can’t upload due to some problem. So it’s 4 stars in the present time and will stay like that for the future as well. ⭐️Story Development⭐️ [5 STARS] I honestly like where the story is currently heading, as the character development seems steady while the struggle the mc faces is realistic, considering the strata he is in with his undeveloped strength. Besides that he got some pretty OP skills/Titel that pretty much guarantees that he will turn out to be a being of reality breaking proportions. 🗿 (an abomination) ⭐️Character Design⭐️ [4 STARS] Personally I’d give you 5 stars if I was nice but as I stay neutral, I will just say that your mc is certainly entertaining, EVEN if he got a bit of a screw loose, it still doesn’t mean he matches my own preferences 100% the same way it does or doesn’t for others as well. Besides that I have to admit that your character design is well made, so don't let complaints of imposters🥸demotivate you.🫠 ⭐️World Background⭐️ [5 STARS] To be honest, as this is a fanfic, the world background was already made by the original creator BUT considering on how well you presented it and the knowledge you showed off, I can certainly say you will do pretty well in this regard without any major problems, since most other Authors are good at this as well which you are too.🫨 (though, there are always exceptions as you know…) ⚡️Summary⚡️ Overall, this novel seems to have a lot of potential, with an Author that shows in-depth knowledge of the original work he made a fanfic off. Besides that we got a MC with his fair share of problems and character development, OP skills with the potential to become a being of reality breaking proportions he was always meant to be, as well as a fair share of struggles at the beginning, that he faces with his undeveloped strength in an environment that can easily erase him. Humans are prone to make mistakes, so forgive the Curious Goose Author if he makes a mistake twice since if he does it thrice, then you can make food with heavenly goose 🪿meat 🍖 and rice 🍚. 🥹 👻Personal Note👻 This review was written long ago but always got shadow banned by Webnovel, because of the word "ØPPØẞĪTÉ" that I used in this review previously. 💀 I hope this novel gets popular considering just its sheer potential. Either way, good luck 🍀 👍 ✨4,4 Overall Stars✨

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