Review Detail of some_Phreak in Re:Life in my Ideal World

i won't be as shameless as other authors about their story. My update stability is highly lacking. i consider this story to both be practice, and establishment of formats and styles for the next 2 stories that i have planned. Using real people as the basis for the characters has been a crutch, but it also limits a lot of personal details. Most of my writing is counter- Hollywood/Barbie culture. i try to separate the specific topics into different chapters in case my topics don't interest you. As of now i typically try to write between 1500-2000 per chapter, but the chapter lengths can change due to edits or if i find out that there is better length for the consumers when i start the fictional parts of the story. i do need much more criticism to improve anything that is agreed to be a flaw instead of conscious choice against mainstream point of views.