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Stardreamer12
Stardreamer12Lv31yrStardreamer12

Okay, so I like your story, especially the idea that the protagonist is the only remaining Nascent bloodline. You have a nice plot and a good theme. Chapters 1 and 2 are already okay since you've put a lot of description and enough dialogue between the characters, making the reader really know what's happening. However, in Chapter 1, I feel like it lacks dialogue and relies too much on descriptions. So, I suggest that the author writes more dialogue to balance it out. Your story is good, so keep it up, author

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The Nascent Bloodline

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Paul_Okito
Paul_OkitoAuthorPaul_Okito

Thank you, I will work on that. Thanks for your review, I really appreciate.

Pendulum_
Pendulum_Lv12Pendulum_

Give mine a try: Sword God Reincarnation: Takemikazuchi Tensei.