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Monosir
MonosirLv21yr
2023-04-22 05:49

Not bad… bit of cliche here and there, and some fix up of grammar is needed, but is a lot better than almost 80% of the novels I’ve seen on here. Some of the narrative and dialogue don’t seem to draw me in, and I won’t go into detail about that, as I’m not an author. Overall, pretty good.

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Yorbin
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I'm quite torn on this one. First, the good things are that the writing quality is excellent by WN's standards. Then there are a bunch of likeable characters, but the MC isn't of them and the plot is nothing we haven't seen before. I don't really mind clichéd stories as long as the characters are likeable, but the MC leaves a lot to be desired. He has too many negative personality traits and no good ones. He's wimpy, naïve and a crybaby. He knows the plot of the novel, but he doesn't use it. He isn't the brightest tool in the shed, honestly. And these aren't things that you'd consider part of character development, there's no internal struggle with these ones. His internal struggle is about guilt and that's what he has to overcome, but his wimpy, naïve and cry-baby nature is just a part of him. Maybe he'll man up in the future, but if you want to read it now, you will have to put up with that. That might not bother you, but it was frustrating to read, honestly. Anyway, to put a positive spin on all of this, I bring you the cry-counter, that is, how many times the MC has cried throughout all 35 chapters. Chapter 1. Cried 3 times. Cried in the 4th paragraph. He then cries again when his mother calls him. Then he cries later as he's getting isekai'd (that's a new one.) Later, he cried when he was reborn as a baby but I'm not counting that one. Chapter 3. Cried twice. Chapter 4. Cried once. Chapter 7. Cried once when his teacher tells him a story about his mother whom he barely knew. Chapter 10. Cried twice during goodbye with his tutor's last session. Cried in chapter 15 when [SPOILER]. Chapter 20. Cried twice. One in a flashback, but then cried repeatedly over a long period of time in that flashback. Chapter 21. 2 times. The crying from chapter 20 spilt over (pun-intended) to chapter 21. He then cried again once more after that. Chapter 24. 2 times. He cried when he saw the devastation of the town then cried again after [SPOILER]. Chapter 28. 3 times. He cries when someone gets injured. He then cried again with a hug. Then he cries later when he says goodbye to a loved one who was going to be in danger and continues to cry for a while. Chapter 31. Cries once. Pretty big spoiler so no details. Chapter 34. Cried once remembering the events of chapter 31. Chapter 35. Cried twice. Crying of chapter 34 carried over to 35 and then he cried later. He cried a total of 23 times. I don't think I've cried that much in my entire life lol.

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