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2023-05-21 23:19

The story is interesting from the start, every chapter has a revelation that you didn't expect and it has good narration as if every scenes playing inside your mind. It's just my opinion but you should refrain from using too much ellipses (...) and unnecessary expression that you can just show in better way so the readers will engaged to it. Overall, it's a well-made story and I highly recommend it to everyone who loves to read a fantasy story.

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Yes, I actually agree. When I went back and read, I found much of the sentence is messy. I'll try to mind your suggestion.

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