Review Detail of Shanto_Akter in Limitless Evolution: The Path To Immortality
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I don't see many reader talking about it maybe i will be the minority here . LET START WITH MY PROBLEM : You are trying to pull this past life too much . i can see that you have inspired by " jobless reincarnation " .In that story his past life played a very important role in his present early life but your story and that story are very different in there MC . In you story the MC is " genius " " master of all and everthink " " kill of billion " " receiver of a mysterious power " On other hand the guy was a " loser " . the problem having all the titles is that you not that smart .I am say that you are dumb but " if someone master everything that means he can read fast and memorize them all Then why didn't he read every book he can his hand around that include his grandmother and everyone they know . " I don't think you know the amount of knowledge humankind have this moment in time . ABOUT THIS PAST : is he really a genius or world killer ? he is giving me the vive someone how is mentally ill . yes he think he did many thing BUT all in his head . you are too hard to sell that he is genius or something . LIKE ( I invented so many thing without count not only that i know everything and master them all BUT i am just only bad at this particular thing that you are asking right now ) . ( see how genius he is . you are too stupid to see this monstrous genius . he is going to be genius in future ) . story is going good . but you need to settle on someone how trying to not repite his mistake or a guy how doesn't about anything around him .
Limitless Evolution: The Path To Immortality
Animosity
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it is just a suggested he should go for all four elements . it will help you to meet influential and powerful people how wouldn't having few faver with one in million talent . it can also be use for his future source of conflict .not everyone going to like you .+=====+ how many pinky promises you remember from your childhood . if she was teenager that would make some sense .+=====+ NO . it wasn't he didn't know anything about the kids . what if someone was blessed with some ability . Does he think his mystic eyes are all seeing eyes if he think that he is more stupid then i thought . Mystic eyes can be all seeing eyes but he didn't tested it's limited or how can anyone bypass it or it can even be possible ? you need take a step back on he calculated everything mindset. because he didn't know anything about them . To calculate the future of an action you need understand the present state of every thing that would be affected by the action (how they are and there family and etc ) and how did the thing came to this state ( is they are arrogant or their family conflict with your family or etc ) and what outside factor that can affect the thing's ( the girl's teacher and teacher teacher or some family guard whose job is to observe or etc ).what if when he unleash his bloodlust everyone in the hole village can feel it ? why didn't they understand the implication of this much bloodlust? +=====+ WTF ! Why No one will believe that a child-like Silas was capable of beating a 19-year-old ? just simple why ? Why he also assumed that his parents wouldn't believe her ? i don't think everyone think she is a pathological liar or every other children is ? +=====+ i want you give this suggest early i thought it would be impolite to do so but after talking with you that i understand that we are unable to see each other point of view and i think this will help you . Find someone in REAL OR IN INTERNET someone with different pov and try to explain you ideas and him find flows in them and find ideas around the flows or make the flows some plot point .what do you think about the character and what he sees the character in book . what character arc you them too go . what future character you have in mind how they think , who they impact the world , etc etc ( THANK YOU READ SIMPLE THOUGHT )
Animosity:You make a lot of good points. The main reason he isn't showing his prowess as a mage is that he doesn't know how to absorb one element at a time; if he does show them he is a mage, he will have to show them his affinity toward magic. When he touches the tablet, he will either not absorb any of the elements or absorb all of them. This problem will be fixed soon, though, as I had promised in one of my other comments. The girl had asked him to fight, and he saw an opportunity to take advantage of her declaration by suggesting whoever wins gets a favor. He knows that she will most likely be extremely powerful both politically and physically in the future. Having someone like her owe him a favor will put him in a powerful position in the future, especially over someone he might consider a "Threat" The bloodlust during the fight was reckless but calculated. The only witnesses were a bunch of teenagers and children. No one will believe that a child-like Silas was capable of beating a 19-year-old, and from Silas' scouting with the use of Mystic eyes, he believed that no one other than them was in the area to witness the fight. Sure, his sister was there, but he also assumed that his parents wouldn't believe her. Finally, you make a good point about letting others drive the plot forward instead of Silas doing so. I will either rewrite the chapter to fit that narrative or do it from this point onwards. Thanks for the comment. Appreciated.
thank you for the review. you make many good points and I agree with some and not with others. the level of his knowledge is dependent on the resources in his family home. He might have been considered a genius in his past life, but with limited supplies and information in his current home, it becomes infinitely harder to secure the knowledge needed to make him a "genius". This is not to say that the mc is not mentally ill. he most definitely is, as I had implied several times throughout the first 30 chapters or so, but not the way you have described it. Seth Evergreen was a prideful and even arrogant man who prioritized himself over everyone else. this does not mean Silas Skylark will be that same man. People evolve, and Silas might just surprise you. Also, the thing about him being a master of many fields but "bad at this particular thing" is an intentional plot point as well that links to a bigger picture. I try my best to avoid making plot changing remarks for just the sake of plot moving forward (flashbacks included). Anyway, thanks for the review. I appreciate your thoughts on my novel so far and I will strive to improve my writings throughout the near future.
You make a lot of good points. The main reason he isn't showing his prowess as a mage is that he doesn't know how to absorb one element at a time; if he does show them he is a mage, he will have to show them his affinity toward magic. When he touches the tablet, he will either not absorb any of the elements or absorb all of them. This problem will be fixed soon, though, as I had promised in one of my other comments. The girl had asked him to fight, and he saw an opportunity to take advantage of her declaration by suggesting whoever wins gets a favor. He knows that she will most likely be extremely powerful both politically and physically in the future. Having someone like her owe him a favor will put him in a powerful position in the future, especially over someone he might consider a "Threat" The bloodlust during the fight was reckless but calculated. The only witnesses were a bunch of teenagers and children. No one will believe that a child-like Silas was capable of beating a 19-year-old, and from Silas' scouting with the use of Mystic eyes, he believed that no one other than them was in the area to witness the fight. Sure, his sister was there, but he also assumed that his parents wouldn't believe her. Finally, you make a good point about letting others drive the plot forward instead of Silas doing so. I will either rewrite the chapter to fit that narrative or do it from this point onwards. Thanks for the comment. Appreciated.
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