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2024-02-13 21:29

Good style, good ability to convey emotions or the thoughts of the protagonist, perhaps a little more development in each chapter and less getting into Dan's head as the protagonist would make it more fluid, another option is to make the chapters a little shorter. good job

Regret Me Not(BL)

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