Review Detail of EvilSovereignty in Young Demon
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I don’t like the way youre going now I’m not paying you to read this. Even if his sister is yandere she wouldn’t hurt him knowing how she is and mate he is a demon why would he even let her hurt him? Like bruh why do keep adding weird sentences like “Daniel might even die” [when he tells his sister his harem plans why does he need to even inform her] or he is scared even thinking about it or I can’t lie to her” you’re falling down bro
Young Demon
LazyBlack
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E.g Like Mc powers up the harem cause they love them yet They suddenly try to overstep their boundaries and even get violent like wow well their some mc who power even those violent woman who don't even love him just fake love
EvilSovereignty:I was the one who told you to treat her “nicely” when she is acting like a real waifu, not when like this. This novel is suddenly turning to a trash harem novel where mc is a being so good and ovverpowerd yet is scared of his wife or gets hit and hurt
Wow the more I go through the chapters the more si~mp he becomes and a be~ta like wow what happened? Lets forget about villain or demon he is becoming more and more like a Japanese protagonist “feeling guilty? Getting scared? Giving stuff to power a woman who will probably kill him. Suddenly he isn’t a guy who can think properly and has become a josei romantic mc who wears a “stupid smile” < Authors word not mine
you know what ? I don't defend because everything you said is true, the biggest reason why the story is ruined is because I don't really have any goal to write, that is, I don't know how to advance the story at all. Now I understand what the real purpose of outline is Anyway, this was my first novel and I never expected it to go above the good-average level Thank you for your review.
You know that wasn't hate comments that was my anger like seriously I've been folowing your novel from the start And I was like wow but suddenly starts to turn trash. I was like "what is he doing" and the anger and dissapointment was I was genuinely invested in it now it feels like a waste of time and money like seriously what was going through your head to do that when you were doing so great?
LazyBlack:you know what ? I don't defend because everything you said is true, the biggest reason why the story is ruined is because I don't really have any goal to write, that is, I don't know how to advance the story at all. Now I understand what the real purpose of outline is Anyway, this was my first novel and I never expected it to go above the good-average level Thank you for your review.
Thought i was the only one who noticed these things. It did feel like a first novel, first chaps were properly planned but then it suddenly went south with no clear aim in mind. This is a decent stab at a first novel, so i will refrain from being harsh. I geniuinely liked it up to a point, until MC started treating women poorly or being scared of them or whatever... Felt chaotic and aimless. Next time, i recommend creating an outline for the main story/side stories then MC, Harem and stick to them.
I don't understand why you get discouraged, you should know that they will always criticize you, even if you do the best work, Are you taking a break or are you planning the novel or is the novel down?
LazyBlack:you know what ? I don't defend because everything you said is true, the biggest reason why the story is ruined is because I don't really have any goal to write, that is, I don't know how to advance the story at all. Now I understand what the real purpose of outline is Anyway, this was my first novel and I never expected it to go above the good-average level Thank you for your review.
None, I don't have time to update because of the exams, especially this year, which is an important year for me
Abram_Banegas_3288:I don't understand why you get discouraged, you should know that they will always criticize you, even if you do the best work, Are you taking a break or are you planning the novel or is the novel down?
MangaisLife1:Well atleast author is admitting his mistake and you can always go back re edit chapters and improve
Dude, are you seriously saying that are you blind? Even the author is admitting it so what's your problem? It's a review I did it cuz this novel was really going good and I liked the novel alot and even paid for it f ing trash like go take your trash fake sympathy bot talk somewhere else
Abram_Banegas_3288:I don't understand why you get discouraged, you should know that they will always criticize you, even if you do the best work, Are you taking a break or are you planning the novel or is the novel down?
Just so you know, you're latest attempt to respond to Evil didn't actually get posted. I'm guessing you must have used a word webnovel censors.
LazyBlack:you know what ? I don't defend because everything you said is true, the biggest reason why the story is ruined is because I don't really have any goal to write, that is, I don't know how to advance the story at all. Now I understand what the real purpose of outline is Anyway, this was my first novel and I never expected it to go above the good-average level Thank you for your review.
Sinful_Cyanide:Just so you know, you're latest attempt to respond to Evil didn't actually get posted. I'm guessing you must have used a word webnovel censors.
It’s okay I read it lol and now sorry I don’t think I’ll even be reading cuz ruining a good fanfic in the middle for no reason I don’t get him bro
Sinful_Cyanide:Just so you know, you're latest attempt to respond to Evil didn't actually get posted. I'm guessing you must have used a word webnovel censors.
