Review Detail of LazyCaveman in Blood And Iron (ASOIAF/GoT)
Review detail
I am to say the least, disapointed. I loved the original even with all of its flaws, it was well written, barely any grammer or punctuation mistakes, and the story and characters felt alive. When I heard there was going to be a rewrite I was not happy to say the least but I added this story and let the chapters build up, now that I’ve read this I’m disapointed that the quality of the story when it comes to grammer, punctuation, and characters have gone down hill. I’m still going to read it but I wanted to air my grievances
Blood And Iron (ASOIAF/GoT)
Chill_ean_GUY
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Regarding grammar and punctuation, it's because I'm currently busier and have less time to dedicate to the chapters compared to before. Previously, each chapter took about 6 hours to complete, including writing the translation and editing. Now, I only have three hours since I've been considering addressing these issues during my vacation in August and editing everything. As for the characters, I would appreciate it if you could share your opinion on what bothers you, as I have been portraying them as they generally are: gray or in a gray scale
I understand the time constraint, but the charecter dialogue is pretty bland, while it’s a decent base, you need to add more descriptive words and inflections to the dialogue, instead of just a wall of words give them more mannerisms and things like that, describe facial expressions, tone all of those kind of things. Keep up the great work though!
Chill_ean_GUY:Regarding grammar and punctuation, it's because I'm currently busier and have less time to dedicate to the chapters compared to before. Previously, each chapter took about 6 hours to complete, including writing the translation and editing. Now, I only have three hours since I've been considering addressing these issues during my vacation in August and editing everything. As for the characters, I would appreciate it if you could share your opinion on what bothers you, as I have been portraying them as they generally are: gray or in a gray scale
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