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Darktokio
DarktokioLv41yr
2023-06-09 13:33

La historia es mala, me leí hasta el capitulo 30 y el protagonista salio en menos de 2 capitulos con algunos dialogos despues de eso todos son personajes secundarios malos. El protagonista no hizo nada desde que comenze a leer hasta el punto que ni me acuerdo el nombre. Lo de la infiltración al reino de alto jardín y a los capas doradas fue mala. Las tramas son pésimas como por ejemplo los nobles fanáticos, solo lo arresto y termino el problema. Donde esta el desarrollo de los personajes fueron transportados a una tierra desconocida y les da igual su situacion donde esta el panico. Luego el tamaño del ejercito 120 k es mucho para la historia que querés contar, hubiera sido mejor que tuviera un ejercito chico de menos de 10 k y que el prota se gane un feudo como recompensas de la guerra y no un reino entero.

Blood And Iron (ASOIAF/GoT)

Chill_ean_GUY
4.7
234 Chs

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SEEKER
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thank you

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Chill_ean_GUY
Chill_ean_GUYAuthor

Hi, guys, here is the author, as I said I will continue with the story but I will rewrite it and add more chapters, as always I am open to your comments as I am always looking to improve, please leave your reviews as sincere as possible I don't care if it is the minimum grade, 5 stars because I am an shameless author.

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I am to say the least, disapointed. I loved the original even with all of its flaws, it was well written, barely any grammer or punctuation mistakes, and the story and characters felt alive. When I heard there was going to be a rewrite I was not happy to say the least but I added this story and let the chapters build up, now that I’ve read this I’m disapointed that the quality of the story when it comes to grammer, punctuation, and characters have gone down hill. I’m still going to read it but I wanted to air my grievances

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