Review Detail of JustSomeAirBison in Overhauled
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I honestly think this has potential to be good. The only thing holding the story back is the MC being more unlikeable than Bakugo. (I stopped at chapter 14 so take this with a grain of salt) The MC is insistent at not changing the storyline too much that he'd let Bakugo torment him during middle school, which is funny because he took Kai Chisaki's quirk and killed him, changing the canon story in the future. He's apathetic, narcissistic and dismissive towards his classmates just because he's mentally older. He tries to pat himself in the back by saying he'd give Izuku a push but all he really does is insult him in his head lol.
Overhauled
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I feel like your character was fine, though. It was as "realistic" as van be tbh. I can't imagine the Mc wanting to hang around a bunch of kids and acting like one of them when he is mentally mature than that. I think this type of progression where he slowly comes around is the best. It's not easy knowing the future or at least the general trend of the future.
EpicBean:Thanks for the review! I do agree that character is a big weak point of mine and I am trying to get better at it. I do think that Nick improved a lot when he met the big three and started to grow a friendship with them. Thanks for the advice though and giving the book a shot!
Thank you! That was the goal that I was going for, in the end I don't know how well I achieved it and I do think that I could have portrayed it better. But thanks a lot! I am glad that someone likes how I portrayed it!
Zom_bloog:I feel like your character was fine, though. It was as "realistic" as van be tbh. I can't imagine the Mc wanting to hang around a bunch of kids and acting like one of them when he is mentally mature than that. I think this type of progression where he slowly comes around is the best. It's not easy knowing the future or at least the general trend of the future.