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2023-07-22 05:18

Everyone's already mentioned grammar, so I won't hammer on about how awfully ineligible it is. A few other things stood out to me. 1. Your chapters should be between 1200 to 1500 words on lower average if you ever want to land a contract. It's also what people are used to reading here. Yours are a bit too short. 2. There is too much dialogue for the amount of action you have going on, and it's too cluttered amidst descriptions and narration. 3. Chapter naming: you need to only use the actual name for your chapters, currently they read as Chapter 6: Chapter Six. 'Tis no good. I also recommended some tools that might help you with proofreading. Also, check out the writer's academy on inkstone. It has some very solid guides. Good luck, and don't give up.

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