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2024-04-11 10:11

Man. I was very interested in this story due to exploring ancient magic and possibly being an op smart character. Instead I got a remarkably idiotic and forgetful character. Admittedly I didn’t get very far in the story. I simply couldn’t take the cliches and things that just plain don’t make sense. How he acts. Characters act. How they speak. If the story gets better later on props to you. But imo I can’t see it getting better with the groundwork you’ve already laid.

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Author here, giving a shameless 5 star review after chapter 61. Il also take this opportunity to explain some thoughts below. So I kinda started this story on a whim. I have not written anything since college, and even that was more for a newspaper, so needless to say, this is my first real attempt at any real storytelling. And you can kinda tell in the earlier chapters if I’m honest. Quality has improved and we’re constantly over 2k word chapters now. Also, I’m not trying to hype anything up, but I got some good storylines planned out that I’m confident nobody should be able to guess, even having played the games and watched/read all the HP media. I will admit though, that my story is gonna be very long. You might’ve been able to tell from my prophecy, but I got a few OCs to introduce still ahaha. We’re at 132k words/61 chapters, and I have over 300 chapters planned (at least lol). We’ve finished reintroducing a lot of the main HP characters at this point (chapter 61) also developing and introducing their relationships with our MC. He is basically done catching up with the current situation. So canon changes are starting to occur. And I don’t want to spoil too much, but I will say that if my plans work out properly, this will be a completely different Harry Potter AU by the time I’m through with it. Anyways, even though it’s a bit long, I hope you give this story a chance and read up to the end of the first intro volume. It gets better (in my humble opinion) and I promise, it’ll keep getting better [img=recommend]

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