Review Detail of Loophus in Chakra Progenitor
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well the writing is there but it becomes really boring because he serounds himself with nothing but op people in the beginning like he has Madara, sintama,the 7 deadly sins and so on. all that right at the beginning and the mc goal is to make a store in every multiverse don't know why because he can make all the money he wants and never be broke just a lot of pointless things he doing in the story
Chakra Progenitor
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true, I was just saying if played right it could have worked a bit cramped but still worked on the other hand what came out was too Op. not enough slice of life because his harem that didn't development slowly and a familia that's has little to no comedic relief.
Loophus:I really don't think this world need a multiverse travel for one it already has everything it needs many pantheons different races and world ending antagonist to much add ons to keep focus on
I honestly think the ideas have lot of potential but have failed to deliver like the store owned by a god that can't be touched by the others works but it would have been better if the store was magical and opened to those in the dungeon that need it or are main characters
killersoul:it clearly said it was his dream to open the store so he doesn't do it for money obviously mate that said I agree a lot of things in this story make no sense like how he can apparently replicate someone who's supposed to be the same power level as him
the familia should have been his and not other Op characters maybe if they were newbies like Naruto's young cast, Rwby cast, young Goku's cast bulma can be put to run the store and sell her gear, the one piece cast before crocodile, Dxd main cast, kazuma and aqua so they can meet real gods, harry, Ron and Hermione for the magic aspect
Sky_Ler_8906:the familia should have been his and not other Op characters maybe if they were newbies like Naruto's young cast, Rwby cast, young Goku's cast bulma can be put to run the store and sell her gear, the one piece cast before crocodile, Dxd main cast, kazuma and aqua so they can meet real gods, harry, Ron and Hermione for the magic aspect
I really don't think this world need a multiverse travel for one it already has everything it needs many pantheons different races and world ending antagonist to much add ons to keep focus on
Sky_Ler_8906:the familia should have been his and not other Op characters maybe if they were newbies like Naruto's young cast, Rwby cast, young Goku's cast bulma can be put to run the store and sell her gear, the one piece cast before crocodile, Dxd main cast, kazuma and aqua so they can meet real gods, harry, Ron and Hermione for the magic aspect