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Netaram_Rajak
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2023-03-17 13:28

plotline is good and interesting, but i believe you should remove 18+ tag from synopsis, there is nothing 18+ in the novel.

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Moose_3565
Moose_3565Lv13

Read up to chapter 20 and it’s good so far. Instead of other novels in this genre where the MC is a cringe ”alpha male” and the FLs are all mas*chists with room temperature IQ, MC pulls out his uno reverse card and despite not being a good person and being the villain in the setting makes himself out to be the hero and the hero to be the villain. It could still be done a bit better IMO by using a bit more subtlety and using his system and acting skills to make it out like he’s a misunderstood good guy. Certain scenes and development though do feel somewhat rushed at times, and almost everything that happens the MC directly tells to the FL which I think weakens things. Instead of coming across as a 200 IQ 3D chess player that convinces the FLs that he’s a good person and the protagonist is ‘evil’ while not appearing to be involved at all, it’s more like an ad*lt lying to a gullible kid and they believe it no questions asked. An example is instead of letting the FL “sneak behind the MC’s back” to ask if the protagonist got married to 3 other girls, the MC tells her to go and ask. In the future having the FLs “accidentally discover” things would improve the novel IMO. Things people “figure out” by themselves are always more believable to them. (Another example would be like if the MC gets injured protecting an FL somehow, instead of saying “look I got injured protecting you, I demand a kiss as compensation” or some other cringe line, MC ”tries to hide” his injury and the FL “discovers” it and realizes he cares about her enough to hide it so she doesn’t worry about him) Stuff like that where MC has a more behind the scenes role would make things funnier imo. Overall though the novel is quite good, and I think it’s a breath of fresh air from the nonsense I have to sift through on this platform on a daily basis. It reminds me of “Regressor instruction manual” with Light KiYoung a little bit if you’ve ever read that novel.

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