Review Detail of Opal_professor in Ruthless Business man
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bland. the characters are not explained properly. everything is just surfacely touched. the chapters are way too short, it kills immersion. your vocabs are fine, the grammar too. research on how to write. read good books. can be improved. would be better if you did a rewrite
Ruthless Business man
Bharati_Singha_7905
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If you want my genuine advice then scrap this novel in this site. And do a rewrite from the beginning. readers won't have the patience to read the story to see what changed. they don't know you or your story. save all of the chapters and then only use it as a guide of how the story progresses and write with a new style. i can see you are putting effort. but it's perfectly clear that you are a greenhorn. 1- scrap this novel. and save it on your pc. 2-use the saved novel as a guide to how the story progresses 3-reasearch good novels. Better stories earn money so that could be your motivation. 4-change your style of writing, again research everything. You need to have patience. 5- post your novel on scribblehub too 6- Interact with the readers but don't seem desperate 7- The most important advice (don't give a shit about anything i said and continue to do what you want) coz u do what you want to do
Bharati_Singha_7905:Man I had changed my summary and I am going to add some gods like being to make the story more interesting. If you have more advice pls comment because of your advice I can see my book's are becoming better
i read again. The main point of writing a story is to make readers interested in it. It doesn't matter if you are excited about the story. There should be conflicts, joy chaos and everything. show us how he is feeling in a situation. give priority to a important scene and gloss over the less imp ones. the writing still feels like it's a summary. explain more in depth. make readers sympathize with the character. we don't want to read about a random nobody. create that connection.
Bharati_Singha_7905:Rewrite In which chapter you think we should do a rewrite . Waiting for your reply
Opal_professor: i read again. The main point of writing a story is to make readers interested in it. It doesn't matter if you are excited about the story. There should be conflicts, joy chaos and everything. show us how he is feeling in a situation. give priority to a important scene and gloss over the less imp ones. the writing still feels like it's a summary. explain more in depth. make readers sympathize with the character. we don't want to read about a random nobody. create that connection.
Opal_professor: i read again. The main point of writing a story is to make readers interested in it. It doesn't matter if you are excited about the story. There should be conflicts, joy chaos and everything. show us how he is feeling in a situation. give priority to a important scene and gloss over the less imp ones. the writing still feels like it's a summary. explain more in depth. make readers sympathize with the character. we don't want to read about a random nobody. create that connection.
remember me I am here again with a new story and honestly to say I Have a new story with a new idea to see it this time I am ready
Opal_professor: i read again. The main point of writing a story is to make readers interested in it. It doesn't matter if you are excited about the story. There should be conflicts, joy chaos and everything. show us how he is feeling in a situation. give priority to a important scene and gloss over the less imp ones. the writing still feels like it's a summary. explain more in depth. make readers sympathize with the character. we don't want to read about a random nobody. create that connection.