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Max_Dreamscape
Max_DreamscapeLv141yr
2023-02-16 06:29

Beautiful. The MC is not needlessly OP neither too weak. He is humane but also smart. Despite reading up to only 15 chapters, the world building is nice and realistic.

Naruto: immortal Ninja

xiaoyasso
4.6
46 Chs

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Godking2000
Godking2000Lv4

You said too weak does that mean he is weak just not too weak

1yr
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KasiCair
KasiCairLv1

Honestly, you won't even notice if he is strong or weak as you read it. Not with all the simping for Nawaki there is in the story. Now, to be completely fair to the author, the story might be not my cup of tea as I find the development mind-numbingly boring, but it is well-written and quite okay. The focus on Nawaki is justified as the boy was MC's gateway to tutelage under Mito and whatnot. I just don't like how much focus there is on Nawaki and MC's bromance. It made the story boorishly dull for me. But what do I know? You just might enjoy it. Don't worry about how strong the MC is right now. His ability is quite OP as far as potential goes so click on that read button and give it a go without asking useless questions. See for yourself.

Godking2000:You said too weak does that mean he is weak just not too weak
1yr
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Giga_Weeb
Giga_WeebLv2

Of course the worldbuilding is good. Fanfiction is having the source material do it for you.

1yr
Nerdio
NerdioLv2

Not at all man, to make a really good fanfic you expand on the plot and create your own😉

Giga_Weeb:Of course the worldbuilding is good. Fanfiction is having the source material do it for you.
1yr
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WoahBuddy
WoahBuddyLv1

I only read three chapters. I didn't enjoy reading it. I think this story has potential for those who like to read a fast-paced story. But this isn't for me. I thought the overall story was ambiguous and average. The MC is commonplace in most narratives, such as personality and attitude-wise. We get the standard MC package of being an orphan, quiet, intelligent, big ambitions, etc. I thought the overall writing was somewhat decent. It has punctuation and capitalization issues, but the overall flow was good. The text feels robotic and stiff, with little to no emotion. It's highly monotonous: "Haru did this, then this, and then later on, did this." Overall, it's a 2.8/5 for me

1yr

Foodi
FoodiLv4

Great story, keep going بنت بلادي 😂❤️ ..

1yr
AllenCross
AllenCrossLv1

This will be brief, but the quality of the writing is excellent (as for me) everything reads easily (especially for non-native speakers like me). The story updates are excellent, the author regularly updates his story. Plot development, everything is debatable, like it's interesting to watch the development, but this interest is lost by chapter 20 (maybe a little earlier), then just goes emotionless text (as if in medical school) which does not cause any emotions, even joy (maybe it's just me). Also starting with a certain chapter (32) where Haru chooses his path after the academy, you can safely remove the spirit of adventure in this story (I may be wrong). Character design, the author does a great job of showing (revealing) us characters like Mito, Navaki. They are lively, especially Mito. Haru (the main character) is interesting, thoughtful (works his brain) not overwhelmed with hormonal background character (kudos to the author for that). Well the history of the world: an interesting period in the Naruto universe is taken. Can't say much more than that. In conclusion, the story is good, well its lack of emotionality to the missing (maybe) spirit of adventure, which a priori should be in the world of Naruto. It is puzzling. I recommend that you read the story. But something exciting to expect from it is not worth it.

1yr
Zeenon
ZeenonLv13

It's really good. Give it a try. Good Work Author.

1yr
Devil_Gamer_0071
Devil_Gamer_0071Lv2

Author-san u gotta improve. It looks more like those "Reading of a Novel" types. Its in the form of a summary with some dialogue or interaction. I also urge you to drop the Essay foat of writing. Seeing all those big paragraphs already forms a reluctance to read for us readers. Also its difficult to find the part we stopped reading if its in some where between the big fat paragraphs. Using short paragraph will make the chapters more pleasant to read. Grammer is quite good so no issues there. I am saying this cauz i have checked the writing quality of the chapters. But i will admit i have not progressed much with the story. No doubt the story might be good but i feel reluctant to read those big fat paragraphs. Thats all. [img=recommend]

1yr
Blackwater
BlackwaterLv11

it's starts pretty good overall the first few chapters are pretty upbeat, and the development is nicely paced and gives time for the characters to develop a bit. Sadly, after the time skip, it goes just downhill. The character changes from a calm and collected character to a cold shifty one. It kinda takes all the fun out of the story and doesn't make much sense to me as even the plot gets darker with little to no world building in that direction. The story overall is not bad, but I didn't enjoy it in the later half.

1yr
ShifuLong
ShifuLongLv3

Sir author, could you add romance to the story? .......................................................................................................

1yr
Novel_Lover_2360
Novel_Lover_2360Lv3

Story is amazing it's just 16 character until now but yeah i like it

1yr
Quadrelm
QuadrelmLv4

Dear author I really liked this novel. Hope you don't actually drop it as there are no updates for the past month...

1yr
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