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Fowl_Immortal
Fowl_ImmortalLv142yr
2023-02-25 11:25

First off, too many names. The amount of names of the chatacters from other shows and/ or games makes up half, if not the whole paragragh. Also some of the paragraphs are way too long, so long that it becomes confusing to read and that they could be split into 2-3 paragraphs. It was good, but with so many things going on in one page it feels like reading a Chinese novel translated through Google translate.

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