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Raizel24155
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I will be honest, at first it was interesting, and as it still interest me (chapter 16) and are waiting for updates some thing are for me incomprehensible. First when in chapter 13 after employing dr Bright and we time skipped several months idk how many lets say 3-5, idk why he still need to go on missions to capture SCP himself, while his points might not be abundant but i think that with daily missions (100 points in chapter 10 for daily mission [ i dont know how points he will get i will go with 100 because thats the only thing i know]) and with dr Bright employment(1000 points per week in chapter 13) it would be sufficient to create a small team. I may be wrong as i dont know how much points is for monthly upkeep of base. Flaws: - i dont see why after time skip (chapter 13) he still dont have a force to capture scp and need to do it himself - is it so easy to track O5?(even when not fully developed) before time skip he upgraded his hacker ability once, i think that after that at least he would upgrade it once especially since he still got discovered. I think that collecting intelligence and keeping secrecy/safety is something you should be concerned about ( HYDRA/SHIELD/HAND/etc.) Pros: - good development - It is interesting, especially the story of dr Bright. I hope for more thing like that when foreing forces ( not SCP foundation) try to capture SCP will be shown. - hope more SCP will appear End: First flaw idk how to eliminate it tbh, it doesnt make sense for me. Second flaw is not a flaw tbh because we can still argue that hydra still have some level of technology, so yeah he could still be found(technology from aliens in captain marvel movie). Ps. I hope you will update and keep it up, sorry if i offended you or something in my review is inconsistent i just want to let you see how it looks from my perspective. While it is long i hope it will help you as i enjoy reading it. My review may be bad when more chapters are revealed.

MCU: I am 05-1

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Raizel24155
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sorry that it is all clumped up but i used shift+enter to make distance beetween things but well i guess it got deleted.

The_Noobulas
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these are good flaws, and the second one I can answer, inexperience. our MC was a regular guy, and makes mistakes like not being low profile taking the smell routes and not properly arming his MTFs, these mistakes I can see leading to him absolutely being tracked by experienced people such has Hydra intelligence, that's a flaw I left for a learning moment, but as for the first it's simply my inexperience, I'm not sure how I would make the story interesting, this is the first novel I've actually committed to and I'm still quite a novice, but I will do my best to address it, thank you for reading, and your honest review

The_Noobulas
The_NoobulasAuthorThe_Noobulas

that's okay, it's really good feedback and I appreciate it, I understand the frustration, I'm sorry if I didn't make things more clear, the reason the mcs been kinda dumb is that I've been trying to communicate a sort of naivete as he was just some random guy, so things like having no counterintelligence measures, always rushing into the first sign of an SCP instead of sending a MTF, even just having one MTF at a time were all mistakes that led to the death of Alpha-1 and Jones last stand, I apologize if the naive mindset of the mc wasn't communicated properly, I will work on it in the future

Raizel24155:sorry that it is all clumped up but i used shift+enter to make distance beetween things but well i guess it got deleted.